anybody here actually GOOD at english??

[MarylandMark]

chief, it's an attachment on this thread agruff.doc...

Ooopppssss- beat me too pointing that out..

 

[MarylandMark]

and my post is at the top of this page. :seeya:

 

[Perlmudder]

interesting topic. now that you have brought up writing papers, thats what i should be doing right now! 2500 due the 20th and 3500 due the 23rd.

 

[Bobcat]

That almost sounds dirty. Like a really bad audition for a porn movie...:26:

there is no such thing as a bad audition.( next!):26:

 

[fund razor]

Phragle:
Please do not take offense, but here's what I have found.

Your sentence structure is clumsy. You have several run-on sentences, some misplaced modifiers and a few dangling participles. If you want me to re-write the whole thing, it would be easier than trying to fix what's wrong. Sorry.
Ed

First I started "correcting." Then I changed to "re-writing."

Then I stopped and came here to read the rest of the thread.

Some of the run-ons are actually two complete sentences and could be fairly easily divided. I noticed that the style was very opinionated, versus opinion dressed up as scientific fact... so my guess is that the assignment was to write it that way. (ie: argument paper for comp 101) It wouldn't pass the essay standard of organization. I assume that it doesn't need to in this case.

This is a fragment, with subject/direct object issues:
"A will full choice to love and nurture or to condemn and neglect by the parent."
My guess is that the parents in the prior sentence are the subject of this sentence and the choice is the direct object. Try moving the subject up front.
"The parents make a willfull choice....."

 

[Ratickle]

I think Triple Digits has time to rewrite it.

 

[phragle]

yep it's an APA arguement paper.

 

[bootdaddy]

I used to write papers for a few friends on the goon squad (football team) at $5 a page.

The 1 strong recommendation to keep it flowing and comprehensive is outline, outline, outline...

And I don't mind dangling participles as long as they are "c" cup or better.

Between Fund and Cozzi an A is in the bag.

 

[phragle]

Except I am now out of time, I have two A's one B shouldnt hurt to much, they always tell me C=degree.... but I am a bit of a perfectionist. Fundi and I are going to have to get together with cookies and beer for the next one though..

 

[Edward R. Cozzi]

Ed for reference on how my teacher grades, this was my last paper, it got a 98%

Phragle:
This one is much more polished and exhibits almost none of the problems with the other one. Good show!

Heavy subject matter, though...way over my head.

 

[stecz20]

hey fa ggle, you dummy!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:03::03: